week #8/52: the drain pipe

Posted under not a photog,not a writer by Laura on Wednesday 16 March 2011 at 11:15 pm

*kind of a long excerpt this week*

week #8/52: the drain pipe

It was a concrete drain pipe, discarded and long forgotten at the side of the creek. She came over, bundled up like a marshmallow in canary yellow, and he was too, in dark green. Snow melted in patches on the ground, but there was none inside the pipe. Instead, he found a black plastic trash bag. He knelt down to it, pushed at it to guess what was inside. He imagined live mice bursting out, or miniature-sized alien creatures, with slimy green skin like toads. But whatever was inside felt firm. He broke it open and found newspapers.

“Wow,” she said, picking one up. “I bet they’re from a hundred years ago.”

The date said 1981. He read a couple words from the headline, stumbled and stopped at one he didn’t know. She looked at the word, mouthed the syllables. “It says ‘embargo.’ Don’t you know anything?” He would have figured it out. She just had to be so quick about things.

“What’s ‘embargo?’” he said.

She shrugged her shoulders. “I heard it on the news once.”

The bag of newspapers was heavier than he expected, and he dragged them out of the pipe and crawled inside, sat in the middle. She followed and sat next to him. He imagined it was a submarine, or a space ship – yes, space ship. He stretched his feet to the other side, pressed against it like there were pedals, turned a steering wheel out in front of him. She pressed her feet out too, but she wasn’t driving. She didn’t need to because he was, and she planted her hands down like she was holding on.

He swooped left, a whole body swoop, and she did too, to avoid a plummeting asteroid. He swooped right, and she did too, so not to collide with another space ship. “Whoa,” she said. “That was close.” But they weren’t out of danger just yet, they were still being chased – yes, by white-suited inter-galactic soldiers in stealthy space jets. He drove, and she held on. She was his sidekick, his wingman. She got to be the sidekick because she was shorter, because he was seven now and she was still six, and because she knew a lot, and a trusty sidekick needed to be smart. She was a funny little twig of a girl with a mop of wild blonde hair. She talked about panda bears or how you should turn off the water when brushing your teeth. She knew every endangered species there ever was. And the planets too, but he taught her that.

- from the practice novel, which is now buried in a shoebox in my closet, may it rest in peace.

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notes: sorry about the length on this excerpt. I always really liked this bit, but the novel as a whole was going nowhere. So I thought I’d rescue a little bit for this photo project, so that it might have its little 5 minutes of glory ;)

Also kind of meh about this photo. It’s not my favorite photo of the week, but as per my project rules, it’s the one that was taken for a story excerpt. If I hadn’t had D with me I could have gotten a better shot, maybe climbed in there to clear some of that brush away. I would have liked a clearer shot into the pipe – it was SO dark in there, and super cool.

And much like the kids in my story excerpt, I totally would have climbed inside if I were 6 (and in fact did climb in many drain pipes like this). But you know, I didn’t want to give my own 4-year-old any ideas about climbing into creeks and drain pipes, lol! ;)

outtakes that I liked better:

outtakes: birth and decay #1 outtakes: birth and decay #2
outtakes: birth and decay #3 shutterbug in training

Friday: now 14 pages a novelist

Posted under not a writer by Laura on Friday 5 June 2009 at 9:24 am

So a funny thing happened (not so much funny-ha-ha, but funny, as in weirdly fateful).

I started a new novel back in December, except I didn’t know it was a new novel when I was writing it. It was right after NaNoWriMo, where in the space of a month, I wrote almost 38,000 words for some ambiguous version of that bumbling first novel I was working on. And immediately after – seriously, like four days later – I got up out of bed in the middle of the night and I wrote the Story That Killed My Novel, the story that blew my novel into a million pieces and a big fat fiery ball of flames. The reason being, even though I was using the same characters for both stories, the two worlds simply could not coexist. And this very short story, just four pages, was so much more important (one of those impossible conflicts that no matter what choice they make changes their whole world) that I just couldn’t look back at my silly little attempt at a story with any seriousness.

That first novel was, in fact, called The World Could Explode. How prophetic.

It was astounding timing! Seriously just four days after wrapping up NaNoWriMo. It was as if I had just finished purging every trace of that first sad attempt at a novel out of my system, and was ready to start fresh. And I started. More than anything, I started because I simply couldn’t go back.

Almost everything has been scrapped. Their names are the same, but their characters are completely reinvented. Looking back on it, maybe they didn’t even have fully-fleshed characters in that first attempt. Maybe that was part of the problem. The fun thing is that the actual Story That Killed My Novel will show up as a chapter in the new novel, and I even know where it goes.

I don’t know what makes me think this attempt will be any different, but I do think I’ve learned quite a bit from that first failed novel. Don’t they say that the first novel you write is just for practice? If not, I’m just going to keep telling myself that because otherwise I would have to feel like a big fat loser for spending a year on something that ended up going nowhere.

I’ve been writing a lot in these six months, even if it is just play-writing. Maybe no writing is bad writing. I feel like I’ve grown. Maybe I can’t know it, but I think I feel it. And for crying out loud, I DO finish things. I’ve finished lots of things before. I am not a failed novelist, I am NOT.

(Sorry, giving myself a pep talk here…)

Anyway, I’m back into it again. A lot of crazy business went down around the turn of the new year, and then there was a big fat move, and it seems it takes about six months to recover from such things. I’m recovered. I’m all plotted out and ready to dig in. And I’m already loving novel #2. I love my characters (they’re still called Danny, Lexi, and Hannah, by the way). They’re spunky and sarcastic and big-hearted and tragic and off their rockers some of the time. I’m only about 14 pages into it, but you know, new novels have to begin somewhere ;)

if a novel could talk

Posted under not a writer by Laura on Friday 6 March 2009 at 11:49 am

Ni Hao Kai-Lan wins this morning. Nick Jr. is running most mornings around here, but he never actually watches it the whole time – which is a healthy thing, I suppose, because then he would be a couch potato. But for the moment, with Dylan engrossed in his cartoon, with twenty minutes of peace tops, just for the heck of it, I reread my opening scene from my first chapter. I read it out loud, which made it feel actual, and different than the way I’ve skim-read it recently.

Oh, how I miss Danny and Lexi, and their ridiculous best friend/lover antics, trying to negotiate if they should or shouldn’t do it before going to his father’s funeral. I mean, really, how funny is that?

If my novel could talk, it would say, “Please write me!”

It’s hard to say how much of it I actually finished, before everything fell to pieces back in December. I think maybe about 48%. And that is certainly not solid from the beginning. But in pieces, here and there, random scenes and some completed chapters, and a good solid outline. I’m looking forward to everything settling back to normalcy again, and I hope when it does, when I get my brain back in my head, the story will come back to me. I really hope. I think it was a good story – or at least not any worse than some stuff out there, lol.

But first it has to be given life, and I guess I’m the only one who can do that. This particular story, in my head, nobody else can finish but me.

NaNoWriMo end

Posted under not a writer by Laura on Monday 1 December 2008 at 8:42 pm

NaNoWriMo Ending Stats
37733 words, out of 50000

Total Novel Stats, as of 12/1/08:
49633 words
150 pages
four sections mostly done (of six), the fifth section is well plotted out, and there are ideas for the sixth (ending) – and the sections will have clever and poignant titles rather than just numbers ;)
24 chapters done (of maybe 40?)
working title, still (but maybe won’t stick): The World Could Explode
POVs: 2 (Danny and Lexi – narrating voices at about age 23, from where the novel ends)
years spanning: 1997-2002
characters knocked off: 1
characters knocked up: 2
car crashes: 2?
theoretical ways the world could end: ~4
number of times Danny keeps a secret for Lexi: 3
number of times Lexi keeps a secret for Danny: 2
average number of major changes per student: 2.33
average number of religion changes per character: 1.75
# of smoking hot sex scenes: 1
# of cute/dorky sex scenes: 2
# of sex scenes that are simultaneously smoking hot and dorky: 1
# of sex references: too many!
percentage of characters who are inherently good, but flawed: 92%
# of evil unredeemable bastards: 1
anticipated mood of ending: bittersweet?
(I’m just being snarky by now – five hours of sleep last night, I’m tired)…

So, I won’t call NaNoWriMo a failure, even though I didn’t make the 50,000 words. Almost 40,000 words in a month is anything but a failure! I’m glad I did it. I wanted some bulk to work with, after having scrapped the whole first version of my novel and started over from scratch. That was about six months of work lost, and was a little discouraging, so I’m glad to have some of it finished again.

day 13: writing what I know

Posted under whatever by Laura on Thursday 13 November 2008 at 3:01 pm

Crap. I’m having just as much trouble trying to figure out where my characters are going to go to college as I did choosing where I would go to college myself! The second college I’ve chosen for them just fell through since I found that they require all entering freshman to live in dorms, and my characters live off-campus in the story. Blah!

Writers don’t generally write college-aged characters, do they? Or not that I’ve found anyway. There’s plenty of high school fiction, plenty of grown up fiction, but no college-aged fiction, and why not, I wonder? I mean, I’m not about to write boring lecture scenes or anything, and in fact, I don’t know of many scenes at all that will actually take place on campus. But I just find it a very interesting time of life. Is it because everybody was so drunk or high in college that nobody remembers it? ;)

So maybe it doesn’t matter? Maybe I’ll just send them to any college? Make up a college? Make up a whole city? Has anyone ever made up an entire university in a work of fiction before? It needs to be a non-selective four-year university, allows commuter students, nearby a metropolitan area, in a city near a river, in Ohio, or Michigan – any ideas? Crap, maybe I’ll just send them where I went, which actually fits the bill.

I keep trying to be creative, and keep trying to write about things and places wildly outside my experience base, and keep coming back to exactly what I know. But most writers do set their stories in the places they’ve lived and worked and studied, right? I mean, that’s pretty normal, isn’t it?

NaNoWriMo Stats: end of day 12
18162 words (on track = 20000)

So anyway, I had a pretty productive day yesterday, and ended up logging about 3000 words. I’m trying not to let this college drama mess up my groove for today.

day 12: on fire, or something

Posted under not a writer by Laura on Wednesday 12 November 2008 at 10:34 pm

Apart from some age/timeline/legal drinking age logistics, I’m totally figuring things out today. I managed about 2000 words today, and I might have a few more left in me before the night is over. And that’s good, since I have a LOT of catching up to do.

I was really stumped over the weekend, stuck at the end of part 2, but now I’ve got part 3 and 4 plotted out. (7 parts in total). Each part having 5-6 chapters. Estimating about 90,000 words for the completed project. Man, I’m such a Virgo. I’ve got word-count-spreadsheets and plot-flow-documents and everything!

Unfortunately, what I don’t have is a solution to my problem: that most people in their second year of college are not old enough to drink legally. Grrr, timelines suck!

NaNoWriMo Stats: end of day 11
15586 words (on track = 18337)

day 11: muse is back!

Posted under not a writer by Laura on Tuesday 11 November 2008 at 3:50 pm

Welcome back, Muse. Hope you had a nice three-day weekend in the middle of NaNoWriMo! Not allowed, I’m telling you, not allowed!

We’re back to work today though, and I’m in the process of making something interesting of two once-directionless chapters. Lots of words to make up for…

NaNoWriMo Stats: end of day 10

14516 words (on track = 16670)

day 10: big fat stall

Posted under not a writer by Laura on Monday 10 November 2008 at 10:49 pm

I’m stalled. I show up to my keyboard and I’ve got nothing. I haven’t written anything new since Friday, and instead, the whole weekend I’ve committed a NaNoWriMo no-no, which is stopping to revise! I spent the weekend pulling the events of my part 1 forward a year. It’s interesting. It works. But still, my story progression is stalled in part 2. I need things to happen. I know what kinds of things need to happen, and the tone of what things need to be said, but I’ve got nothing precise.

It’s cold outside. That’s my problem maybe. It’s been about 40 degrees, at the peak of the day, and I haven’t been walking. I always get so many of my ideas flowing when I’m out walking with Dylan. We do a four-mile walk through the neighborhood, him in his stroller with some juice, me just trekking along with my characters rattling away in my head. Man, most of my novel has been conceived on foot.

We just bought Dylan a really warm coat and gloves and hat, and maybe I’ll warm up some apple juice for him or something. But 40 degrees is cold! I don’t want to go out in 40 degrees. I’m whining. You have every right to ignore this post.

NaNoWriMo Stats: end of day 9

14458 words (on track = 15000)

And I haven’t written much today either…

day 9: update

Posted under whatever by Laura on Sunday 9 November 2008 at 5:11 pm

Just a word-count update today. I have nothing else of significance to say.

NaNoWriMo Stats: end of day 8

13132 words (on track = 13336)

day 8: sinkholes, continued

Posted under not a writer by Laura on Saturday 8 November 2008 at 12:01 pm

I was pretty well stumped yesterday, and didn’t get much writing done, and the words I did accomplish were pulled from notes. I spent the day navigating around the massive sinkhole in my story, and I think I’m working it out.

The story is about different things now. The story is about things I never thought I would be writing a book about, but at the same time, I’m also really not surprised either. These are all things I can relate to or have experience with – being a young wife and a feminist at the same time, not wanting to grow up to repeat your parents’ mistakes, and um… “anger management issues” (not sure if I’m brave enough to tackle full-on domestic violence, ack! I’m still deciding.)

My book was not about those things before, and now it is. It will be a better book for it, I think. It will be more precise and less vague and sweeping. And somehow, it’s still based in the same love story that it began from.

NaNoWriMo Stats: end of day 7

11796 words (on track = 11669)

*** my relation to “anger management issues” is not w/ hubby, by the way! I don’t need any interventions, lol, in case anyone was ready to pick up a phone or something. ***

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